Part IV: The Re-envisioning
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For this piece of writhing I would change many things that would make this a better paper. After rereading my paper and looking it over, I would want to do this paper with the same information in a newsletter style the the words adjusted left or right of the pictures to make it look more smoother. I didn't notice quite a few things I thought my paper was well written just because most people had the same amount of pages but it isn't all about length, I left some things out that I could have included or did better as you can see my list below:
- Background information explaining what the holocaust is
- Go into a smooth way of saying how the medical experiments were thought of
- In my intro I would grab the reader's attention more to want to read the paper is about
- have more back ground information on the doctors Karl Brandt and Joseph Mengele
- Get more individual information on the experiments instead of looking at just a couple of sites
- Given more detailed descriptions on the experiments
- I feel like i described the twin experiment well, even had a real life story
- I used words like horrible, terrifying and bad to many times
- Rewrite the whole conclusion, I don't know what I was